Wednesday, September 15, 2010

orion no. 5


this one received a bit of editing
just grammar & word use
nothing major
-it needed it.

orion no. 5

we are mesmerized in motion
marching ~ vibrating ~ pulsating
our small hearts clutched in our little hands
thrust up & over our heads
held like scalps of war

we are dizzy with private thoughts of
genius, grandeur & glory
leading us in shackled feet
to the base of the mountain
whose birds fly crossways
above the tree-line
declaring,

there is a way that seems right to you
........but it’s path ends in humiliation
..............it’s path ends in confusion
....................path ends in vexation
...........................ends in isolation
...................................in degradation
.......................................destruction
... !! ... go no more this way ... !! ...


3 comments:

  1. I love this photo...great job...it's definitely my favorite edit that you have done.

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  2. I like this decreasing of lines...and i love the line about clutching our little hearts, especially the scalps of war part......Ahhh, the good old American dream.

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  3. This is excellent. I love the photo...I love the poem. I would purchase a book of these works. The colors work so well. Like a burnt umber almost...a bit lighter. I can really appreciate the message in it.

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